以下文章是網友對2015年6月英語四級作文《現代生活》的點評版範文，僅供參考!
關於人與電腦這個話題，我們在謀篇構局的時候，可以按三段去寫，開頭部分一定要對圖片進行描述，然後在中間段落展開(注意：本次圖畫側重的'是負面影響)，也可以從正反兩個方面進行對比分析。在行文時，要注意文章的層次和邏輯梳理。
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首段：As is clearly depicted from a series of cartoons that a man is excessively dependent on the computer whether in working and playing or at home and sleeping. The impact of the computer on daily life is such seriousness that it is high time we paid attention to it.
展開段：In the first place, due to the wide application of the computer, some people called net friends always take priority over our family and friends in real life. The bulk of each day including our time and energy is spent on the Internet. What’s more, the Internet deprives us of the delight in communication with others. When taking to someone by us, we can hear their voices, see their expressions, and even hold their hands if we would like to. Last but not least, the computer will lead to a decline of our skills of face-to-face communication. Thus we may feel embarrassed and find it harder to communicate with people around us.
結論段：To sum up, we shouldn’t be dependent on the computer excessively. No matter how convenient and speedy it is, we should remember the advantage of face-to-face communication.
