英語四級寫作話題，一般都會出現一些當今比較熱門的話題或者是比較有爭議性的話題。以下是yjbys網小編整理的關於2016年12月大學英語四級作文練習題，供同學們參考。
作文題目： “Women in the Modern World”
提綱：
1. Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today.____________
2. With the changes in their social role, women’s position in the family has been improved as well. ___________________
3. In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized.
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例1. (2分段)
??Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. Long age, women only did something in the kitchen or at home. Now many of them have serious jobs to serve for people. What men can do so can women.
With the changes in their social role, women’s position in the family has been improved as well. Today in the family, the wife often lots her husband to do something at home bat ago, only women did something. Men are foned of doing something at home.
??In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. Sometimes, the matter, the husband hitting has welf, often happened. In the factory the wonmen to as much as the men, but they are paid less than the men. Some people have not completely realized the liberation of women.
點評：條理不清，思路紊亂，大部分句子均有錯誤，有的.甚至影響理解。
具體問題剖析：(1)缺乏邏輯，東一句西一句，沒有圍繞中心論述，如第一段就沒有展開論述婦女社會角色的轉變，説得太籠統而缺乏説服力。
(2)用漢語思維，句子有明顯的漢語痕跡，如“What men can do so can women.”，應改為“Women can do what men can do”。
(3)銜接不自然，沒有用適當的關聯詞，如“Sometimes, the matter, the husband hitting has welf, often happened”，應改為“The case that husband hits his wife often happens. ”
(4)拼寫錯誤很多，大部分句子均有錯誤。
例2.(5分段 )
??Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. In today, many women have a work. They worked as well as men playing an important part in factories. There are many women in government also. They lead other people country, and make out plans. There are many scientist slso. They event new things to improve our life.
??With the changes in their social role, women’s position in the family has been improved as well. In ancient, women’s position in family is pity. They had to looks after their children, did every how husband ordered her to do. But now it is changed. They are equal to her husband. They have the right of speaking of idea, discussion thing with her husband, do what she wants to do.
In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. We also should realize, women’ likerty are limited. For example, many factories want men become its workers but the chance of women is less than men. Everyone should do their best to change this condition. I’m sure, the liberation of women would be increased.
點評：基本切題。但表達思想不清楚，連貫性差。有較多的嚴重語言錯誤。
具體問題剖析：(1)各段圍繞中心句論述不深入，沒有説服力。
(2)銜接不自然，沒有用適當的關聯詞，如第一段幾個句子之間可以用一些“besides”、“on the other hand”、“furthermore”、“in addition”等。
(3)語言錯誤較多，很多句子不通順，如“In today, many women have a work.”應改為“Today, many women get a job.”(濫用介詞);“In ancient, women’s position in family is pity”中pity應改為pitiful(詞形誤用);“They had to looks after their children, did every how husband ordered her to do.”中every 改為everything，how改為what(代詞錯誤);“They have the right of speaking of idea, discussion thing with her husband, do what she wants to do.”應改為“They have the right to express ideas, discuss things with their respective husband, and do what they want to.”(人稱代詞前後不一致)。
例3.(8分段)
??Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. Many Women today are playing an important part at works that was thought only could be done by the men before. For an example. Some women are not secrtary in the office, instead, they become manager of a company.
??With the changes in their social role, women’s position in the family has been improved as well. In the world today, more and more women have their own job. They get their own salary, and become more independent from their husband. With the economic situation improved, their family position is improving.
??In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. Many husbands only want his wife to stay at home, and do house works or do some shopping. They only want their wife to be a housewife, but not a manager of a company.
點評：基本切題。有些地方表達思想不夠清楚，文字勉強連貫;語言錯誤相當多，其中有一些是嚴重錯誤。
具體問題剖析：(1)論證不夠深入，缺少事例，缺少説服力。
(2)文字缺連貫、且顯累贅，如第二段可以把各句再改得簡練一點並且有適當的轉承詞。(3)語言錯誤相當多，如“For an example”，“Some women are not secrtary in the office, instead, they become manager of a company.”應改為“Some women are on longer secretaries in the office, instead, they become managers of the companies.”(單複數)
